Date: Fri, 6 Feb 2015 18:27:34 +0000
From: Luis de Bethencourt <luis@debethencourt.com>
To: Jonathan Corbet <corbet@lwn.net>
Cc: mchehab@osg.samsung.com, linux-media@vger.kernel.org,
        linux-doc@vger.kernel.org, linux-kernel@vger.kernel.org
Subject: Re: [PATCH] DocBook: grammatical correction on DVB Overview
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On Fri, Feb 06, 2015 at 01:23:15PM -0500, Jonathan Corbet wrote:
> On Fri, 6 Feb 2015 18:17:52 +0000
> Luis de Bethencourt <luis@debethencourt.com> wrote:
> 
> > -video streams. Besides usually several of such audio and video streams
> > -it also contains data streams with information about the programs
> > +video streams. As well as several of such audio and video streams, it
> > +usually also contains data streams with information about the programs
> 
> Not sure if I see this as an improvement or not; you've changed the
> meaning of the sentence a bit.  It also lacks changelog and signoff...
> 
> Thanks,
> 
> jon

Hi Jon,

The original sentence is hard to read, I had to go a few times before I think
I understood what it meant. Which might be different from your interpretation.

How about?:
"Besides several of such audio and video stream, it usually also contains data
streams with information about the programs [...]"

If this isn't worth it and it is just nitpicking, feel free to drop.

Thanks for taking the time to look into this,
Luis
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