2015-02-06 18:19:51

by Luis de Bethencourt

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Subject: [PATCH] DocBook: grammatical correction on DVB Overview

---
Documentation/DocBook/media/dvb/intro.xml | 4 ++--
1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-)

diff --git a/Documentation/DocBook/media/dvb/intro.xml b/Documentation/DocBook/media/dvb/intro.xml
index 2048b53..e98bfa9 100644
--- a/Documentation/DocBook/media/dvb/intro.xml
+++ b/Documentation/DocBook/media/dvb/intro.xml
@@ -85,8 +85,8 @@ real time and re-inserted into the TS.</para>
<para>Demultiplexer which filters the incoming DVB stream</para>

<para>The demultiplexer splits the TS into its components like audio and
-video streams. Besides usually several of such audio and video streams
-it also contains data streams with information about the programs
+video streams. As well as several of such audio and video streams, it
+usually also contains data streams with information about the programs
offered in this or other streams of the same provider.</para>

</listitem>
--
2.1.3


2015-02-06 18:23:21

by Jonathan Corbet

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Subject: Re: [PATCH] DocBook: grammatical correction on DVB Overview

On Fri, 6 Feb 2015 18:17:52 +0000
Luis de Bethencourt <[email protected]> wrote:

> -video streams. Besides usually several of such audio and video streams
> -it also contains data streams with information about the programs
> +video streams. As well as several of such audio and video streams, it
> +usually also contains data streams with information about the programs

Not sure if I see this as an improvement or not; you've changed the
meaning of the sentence a bit. It also lacks changelog and signoff...

Thanks,

jon

2015-02-06 18:29:48

by Luis de Bethencourt

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Subject: Re: [PATCH] DocBook: grammatical correction on DVB Overview

On Fri, Feb 06, 2015 at 01:23:15PM -0500, Jonathan Corbet wrote:
> On Fri, 6 Feb 2015 18:17:52 +0000
> Luis de Bethencourt <[email protected]> wrote:
>
> > -video streams. Besides usually several of such audio and video streams
> > -it also contains data streams with information about the programs
> > +video streams. As well as several of such audio and video streams, it
> > +usually also contains data streams with information about the programs
>
> Not sure if I see this as an improvement or not; you've changed the
> meaning of the sentence a bit. It also lacks changelog and signoff...
>
> Thanks,
>
> jon

Hi Jon,

The original sentence is hard to read, I had to go a few times before I think
I understood what it meant. Which might be different from your interpretation.

How about?:
"Besides several of such audio and video stream, it usually also contains data
streams with information about the programs [...]"

If this isn't worth it and it is just nitpicking, feel free to drop.

Thanks for taking the time to look into this,
Luis